Blog Post 1

“The second important concept is that wet gloves are COLD, no matter what the marketing BS claims. Most people who get cold hands go and buy a pair of “fat” gloves . . . , and their hands get cold ’cause the fat glove gets sweaty inside and is then cold. So they go buy a “warmer” glove . . . , which they then sweat inside, get cold, repeat. Imagine trying to hike and climb in a down jacket; you’d sweat to death and freeze. Yet this is what people try to do with their hands all the time, it makes zero fucking sense. Multiple pairs of light, DRY gloves will be far warmer, lighter and functional than one pair of “warm” fat gloves in the vast majority of conditions. Guaranteed. I like Windstopper gloves.”

Will Gadd 

http://kellycordes.wordpress.com/extras/glove-system-replies/

This passage is not eloquent or particularly well written, but I thought the author’s rhetoric and language choice was an interesting way to establish a certain footing with his readers. I believe he comes off as arrogant and consciously (in my opinion) projects and image of superiority. This establishes a particular superior to subordinate footing with his readers. Although he is probably allowed to be since he is a world champion ice climber. His readers are mostly alpine enthusiasts, so words like “fat” and “Windstopper” are examples of accommodation for his audience. His use of the f-word shows his harsh, yet passionate attitude about the subject.

Imitation

Why do humans live the way we do? We pollute, eat unhealthy, live WAY beyond our means, overly consume, and then have overly consuming babies that pick up where we left off. Dumb. Irresponsible. Down right wrong. It kills me.  I see it every day.  Parents taking their obese, diabetes ridden child to Mcdonald’s. One meal, 5 bucks, and several layers of paper and plastic to be thrown away in a matter of seconds. A one pop bang recipe for obesity, pollution, and extra pocket money for big agro.  It’s an f***ing mess. Our population is too large.  Combine that with an over consuming society and you have a recipe for disaster. It’s mostly unintentional, IMO. I don’t think people are inherently evil. Most people don’t realize the impact their having on the earth and themselves. Their minds are continuously warped by BS marketing claims from companies trying to sell their worthless crap that will in short get added to our MONSTROUS landfills.  Still, NO EXCUSE.  The solution. Not sure. Vasectomies. Probably not going to happen. Nuclear War wiping out a good majority of the population and industrial buildings. Harsh, but probably the best thing for the planet and ourselves.  We have gotten soft.  Our grandfathers grew up in the depression. Ask them about what saving really.  They probably have a few dollars and some penny’s in a lock box under their casket. We are too complacent.  Education is the key. Listen to what I say. Take action now. Spread the word. Success is just beyond the horizon. Done.

William Motley

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3 thoughts on “Blog Post 1

  1. lynn

    I believe your imitation of Will Gadd’s excerpt is a success! You clearly establish an arrogant attitude by acting as though you are superior and more knowledgeable than the readers. What I enjoyed about your piece that was not in Gadd’s , however, was your short sentence structure at the beginning. Short, quick, to-the-point sentences really places emphasis on each outrageous accusation made and creates an even more shocking effect!

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    1. ellalatorres7

      Hi WIll!
      My first thing to say is: hahaha, I loved your excerpt!. I think you chose a very extravagant way to carry your point across. Your writing was very exciting. I could sense the purpose of it, whereas I couldn’t with Gadd’s. You used the short, pungent sentences as a wake up call.
      Gadd’s comment were instead more condescending than anything. He was telling his audience that they were stupid for not knowing why buying a certain product was wasteful. You, you dramatized actions of people’s every day life (like taking your kids to McDonalds) by explaining, rather than straight out accusing. For instance, you mentioned some consequences of consumerism that are often missed by people.
      I loved that you also tried to redeem yourself at one point in your writing saying ” I don’t think that people are inherently evil”. I think that doing that, might have effectively gained back the sympathy of a real audience.
      I also think that you definitely accomplished building a character for the writer you wanted to imitate and a specific footing between the audience and you.
      Next time you should keep being consistent to your point. I think that the short accusations were very appropriate, if your intention was to create a “wake up call” effect (which I believe it was), As your paragraph progressed you used the IMO and started to overuse the short sentence structure. For instance, at the end you said “Done”, which gave me the impression that you were making a joke out of the excerpt too. I think that must have been because it was probably hard for you to keep a rage-fill attitude. But, it would have been almost flawless if you would have done it.
      My last advice is also to take into account the flow of your writing. Although I think that your sentences were definitely connected, I think that sometimes you needed some transition into your next accusations, so keep an eye on that.
      Oh! another thing to try to be would be “gender friendly” instead of saying grandfathers you could have said “grandparents” (Grandmas are also thrifty).
      I am sorry I went on and on, but I really think that your writing is exciting and it was worth telling you what I thought of it.

      Best,

      Estefania

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  2. rakeen0595

    Your explanation of the paragraph you quoted was extremely helpful, especially in explaining to me how Gadd is a champion climber, something I wouldn’t have known otherwise. Without that background information, I wouldn’t quite understand the entire concept of superior footing that you analyze, though after reading that it all made perfect sense. Kudos to you for that. Your imitation was highly enjoyable to read. I think you manage to capture and imitate the crass, direct, to the point and unapologetic tone that Gadd uses, though you write about a completely different topic. Perhaps a topic that’s more important than the gloves Gadd discusses. To be able talk about a bigger issue like that while imitating Gadd that well is quite impressive. Well done! 🙂

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